UNTITLED
Voila!!!Nivya, my friend has written a poem which is yet to be titled but already stolen..its on Independence Day..please leave your valuable comments, me and nivya will surely appreciate that..
UNTITLED
It’s the same night once again
With the same bondage
Not of the aliens this time
But of the minds cage
Think of everytime you have stood back
Due to indifference and fear in your heart
How may lives you could have changed
But how upon them you dart
Tonight resolve to break this change
which hold u tight
for your blood must run through yout heart
to give happiness and light
Be deaf to what the world says
And expects you to repeat like a parrot
Listen to your free mind
And let you be the country’s tarrot
In the morning when the sun rises
Let your heart say
That I will make a difference
As its our independence day!!
Mon amie, Nia!!!!!
It’s the same night once again
With the same bondage
Not of the aliens this time
But of the minds cage
Think of everytime you have stood back
Due to indifference and fear in your heart
How may lives you could have changed
But how upon them you dart
Tonight resolve to break this change
which hold u tight
for your blood must run through yout heart
to give happiness and light
Be deaf to what the world says
And expects you to repeat like a parrot
Listen to your free mind
And let you be the country’s tarrot
In the morning when the sun rises
Let your heart say
That I will make a difference
As its our independence day!!
Mon amie, Nia!!!!!
posted by Monami @ 7:17 PM
10 Comments:
well let me say that ur freind writes really well.plz tell that 2 her.infact she shud start her own blog than use ur 2 post more.also tell her about the blooker thing.
dint that encourage u 2?
one thing i found about this was that the rhyming appeared a bit desperate, although i cant give ny suggestion on improving upon that,but nivya shud work up on it.
Very well written. You have started messing up your Blog again ma'm! How? Don't write in CAPS. Write in proper paragraphs. Write proper English. Make enough space after a paragraph. :\
BTW, is the following correct?
How may lives you could have changed
I think that is MANY, not may.
Firstly u were supposed to appreciate it!!!!
I dont have time to write proper english n paragraphs...busy ppl u c..lolz!!i dont like to be formal..i aint writing to a newspaper, its just my space where i can write whatever n however!
n ya thats "many" n not may
well whatever nivya does makes me respect her more and well what she has written i cant even consider doing something like that in the next few 1000 yearsw so three cheers for her.
hi
so finaly i mposting my first comment,well actually a compliment this 1 is.... nivya is just 2 gr8 yar, wonderful poem!!!! even dad read it& he goes like "WOW!" srsly.yar how can ppl write such stuff,i dont understand.icn never ever dream ofit also.i loved d 1st para the most..the samenite the same bondage not of the aliens but minds cage.i think nivya shud have gone4 english hons rather...chalo bye bye c ya.& ya hi 2 all my frnds here! mishthy
=>To sumeet
It certainly did encourage me..she has written so many till now and each one of them is special n moreover since v share nearly same tastes n interests, its always interesting to hear(n also steal) her poems..
=>To Mohit
do u remember u had written a poem in 11th on "Varsh ritu" i think..that was the coolest poem one could ever find..i still remember how badly v laughed over that..awesome it was!!
To Mishthy=>
First of all my heartiest thanks for taking out ur precious time to do the honour of reading MY blog. THANKS A LOT!!<;-)(cool smiley na?just learnt it a few days back)
i forgot to mention that this poem has been written in just 5 min!!!!!!!n whom r u saying hi to?all our friends r big time nalayak..except these 3 ppl out here(ie excluding u) noone reads my blog...SAD!
actually its Riju's effect that nivya writes such good poems!!!!lolz..did comment on ur blog..silly..refresh it!
i bet not a single person will read the article on water privatisation..
now for you chastising me for not writing a comment well here is a positive one to begin with.
It seems that today it is only for a single day the INDEPENDENCE seems to matter, but to read it so very well expressed ( in 5 min u tell us) for one expression of our love for our country that we can read agin and again......
plz mention which mayank it is..coz mayank jain of pune writing words like chastising dont match!!1lolz.
i dunno if i agree with u on saying that it is just independence on which we tend to remember our country..remembering our country doesnt mean we need 2 hav parades n speeches n not to mention the holiday we get..it can be as simple as just working in some or the other way for a better tomorrow..its like our birthday..we celebrate it but does it mean we dont remember ourself daily????
to miniaturize the ppl of this nation like that isnt something which i would agree to..
"mayank jain of pune writing words like chastising dont match"
wat do u mean by dat??
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